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What Shadows Claimed

Fiverr • Freelance

Sep 2026 - Present • 1 mo

The author of an unpublished dystopian fantasy, with elements of dark fantasy and romance novel hired me as a beta reader for the opening chapters, where the story follows a single mother rebuilding her life in a small coastal town. The goal was to understand how the manuscript's quiet, character-driven opening landed with a first-time reader, whether the heroine felt alive, whether the setting had emotional purpose, and whether the story promised enough forward pull. I delivered a five-page reader's report combining strengths with specific, actionable revision guidance. I highlighted what was working: a distinct first-person voice, a mother-son relationship with real warmth, and a setting that mirrors the heroine's own journey—and identified the core development need: the opening promised comfort more than conflict, so I showed the author exactly where to plant early breadcrumbs of tension without sacrificing the cozy atmosphere. I also flagged a pattern of repetitive settling-in details, noted sentence-level polish points, and raised the big-picture questions a reader would keep turning pages to answer. The author received a structured, encouraging roadmap for revision, clear priorities rather than vague impressions, and feedback that respected the tone and heart of the story while helping it grip readers sooner.